a first attempt
A good friend had asked me to write lyrics for a new song for her band. The storyline is basically about a person who's tired of people who only treat her right when they need or want something from her. When they have already gotten what they had asked for, they leave and forget. Like taking that person for granted. Please please let me know what you think. Critic all you want, constructive critiscms don't hurt. Jgn destructive pulak tau. Pity me please :)
Tell me what am I to you
A friend in need or just another face in the crowd
I think I should have kept a quiet mouth
What's the point of talking at all
When you don't hear me out
Too tired to speak, too tired to think
You're wearing me down
Every day the scenario's the same
Perfect smiles from perfect people
Kisses on the cheeks oh so supple
Like the apples in Eve's garden
But how about them hearts?
Never more sneakier than snakes
That I learned the hard way
Chorus
You think you know me but you don't really do
You think you know me but really, you don't have a clue
You seek only perfection
Hey open up your eyes; see the things your heart won't let you see
See me, see you, see the space between
I'm tired of this dance we do
Wrap it up or you might just see the end of it soon
Don't you feel tired?
Of putting people down
Haven't you had enough?
Of pushing me around
Didn't listen to Joni Mitchell did ya?
That you don't know what you got till it's gone
You've been lucky all your life
But hold on tight,
Cause that luck might just run out
Repeat chorus
Bridge
Like a burst bubble I leave no mark
That's how I am
When ridiculed by you
Putting on a mask as I go
Throughout this life that I'm never sure
Help me out here
Should you go or should you stay
I'm not just a ragdoll you can play
Repeat chorus
p.s: This is a first attempt! I repeat, a first attempt! Mane tau bila dah hbs baca, korg gelak terbahak-bahak :/
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nashrahhhhh.. it's beautifulllll~ :)
thank youuuu aimi :"> :)
I think this is GOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDD!
Can't wait to hear it! The band/singer better sing it properly! Maybe Britney should sing this?
haha!
Nice attempt! Like it!
mmg best.
isk.
(masih rasa jeles)
Hahahahha!
hmmm, thats weird. i thought ive left u a comment just now.
nvm, i'll type again.
i think this is great nashrah!
so deeeep!
i feel u!
wonder how the song sounds like though.
hope it has a slow melody because then it'll be even more deep! ;)
especially
"Hey open up your eyes; see the things your heart won't let you see
See me, see you, see the space between
I'm tired of this dance we do
Wrap it up or you might just see the end of it soon"
perrrfect!!
congratulations nashrah!!
Nashrah,
Nashrah,
I beli John Mayer's Where he light Is live in LA.
Nak pinjam?
Hehehehehe!
moja, hahahahahhaa thank u very much :)) this has been put off for too long. bkk laptop type skit, xde idea, tutup blk. lg 2,3 ari type blk. its actually fun :) 2laa me too! nnt bile my fren dah ade d song sung semue ill definitely gv u a listen :D
eh haaa nk nk pinjam! thank u! :D :))
azie, thank u! :)) i find it hard tau to write lyrics. u realy have to think carefully abt what to write. but i waited for the inspiration to come, then i quickly jot it down. its actually a fun process tau :D haa a slow melody would be nice kan? make it a slow, rock-ish song. haa ill suggest it to my fren :D thank u azie!
nash...
wah. wah.
what a piece of artwork.
it is one of my dream to write a lyric u know..
awesome bebe!
thank u tedy :)) ala ckp org, tedy lg awesome! hehehe
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